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Jamie Mc'Cloud
08-07-2005, 06:03 PM
Here you go hon, I hope this is to your standards. Feel free to read and give me some comments guys.

Li-Ming's Final Encounter

By: Jamie

Li-Ming ran out on the rooftop of the huge Chinese police station, her heart was in her throat and beads of sweat dropped off her head, landing on the roof. Her assignment was to kill a senator, but what she had not known was that this was a setup, she was to be killed by the guards occupying the building. Li-Ming hated her job and wanted peace, but she was an assassin and she doubted that she would ever get peace. She now awaited her attackers on the roof of the very building she thought would be her last assassination.
"Time is up, Li-Ming." Replied a rather distant, cold voice from the shadows. The figure walked out and it was her employer, the one man who she had brought herself to trust. He held a 45. pistol in his hand and cocked it. "You are one of the best, but sadly you know too much and you do not mess with higher authorities...or you die." "I thought you would never betray me, Andrew." Replied Li-Ming, a hint of sarcastism in her voice. "But since you betrayed me, then I can break my promise to you!"
She then unsleathed her blade and ran at her employer, sliding on the final part, with her blade aimmed upwards. Andrew parried the attack with his pistol but the tip of her blade pierced his arm and he dropped his firearm. "Pretty slick moves for a girl." Replied a less then happy Andrew who drew back his fist and scored a direct hit on Li-Ming's mouth. Li-Ming stumbled back a few feet and wiped the crimson blood off of her mouth. She then threw her blade aside and balled her hand into a fist and punched Andrew in the stomach.
"I never liked you anyway, you were always thinking way too much." Replied Andrew as he leaped up and landed a strike to her left cheek, a squirt of blood erupting from her mouth. She removed her glove and kicked him in the stomach, causing him to double over, gasping for his breath. "Maybe so, but that is why I always have the edge." After her quick reply she kicked him in throat, then she removed her dagger and slit his throat quickly and painlessly. A streak of blood fell from his throat. Suddenly footsteps were heard as the law enforcement stormed up the staircase.
"Another day, you facist pigs, another day." Li-Ming then jumped off the building landing in the dumpster, banana peels and trash entangled in her glossy brown hair. "Search everywhere! I want this girl dead!" The captain snapped at the guards and she could hear numerous voices above her. She then quietly slinked into the town and was gone, thus she had become an outlaw, a criminal, to the very same government whom she had been willing to die for. Thus began her greatest task ever, escaping the government of China.

The End

Tiger Cat
08-07-2005, 06:56 PM
That's very interesting.

DarthKrystal101
08-07-2005, 07:28 PM
That was great! I enjoyed it. keep it up. ;)

Shadow Flare
08-08-2005, 11:00 AM
Sweet, Jamie! This is like one of those action movie scripts! XD But really, it's sweet as hell. Keep up the awesome work!

Kitt_Kitsune
08-08-2005, 01:07 PM
Jamie, that was great! Thank you so much for your effort, which turned out very nicely, by the way. I find the dumpster part to be kinda goofy, but thats what Li-Ming is. She's not the most graceful of assasins, but definately one to get down and dirty, when need be. ;) *Chuckles*

Overall, I liked it, and I hope you enjoyed writing it too.

Jamie Mc'Cloud
08-08-2005, 06:20 PM
I revamped the last part of Li-Ming's Story. I hope you like this version as well!

"Another day, you facist pigs, another day." Li-Ming then jumped off the building, a pair of black wings erupting from her sleeved top and she flew above the city, the light of the moon shining on her concealed form. Her hair bow came out and her glossy brown hair whipped in the wind as she flew. She did not know where she was going but she did know one thing. She was going to get revenge, she was going to make those facist government officials pay for betraying her. She then dissappeared into the hills of China, to battle again another day.

Flarian Wolf
08-09-2005, 05:50 PM
I liked it.... maybe too much. O_o

Shadow Flare
08-10-2005, 07:29 AM
I like the second ending better. It's cool, and fits what Kitt would probably do. You know, you should write a book. You're really good.

Kitt_Kitsune
08-11-2005, 04:13 PM
Yeah, I like the second one better too.

.. But, wings?! Thats way too cool for Li-Ming. I can see her using the large sleeves of her kimono to glide, but I would'nt mind a little D.N. Angel element to it.

*Loves Dark* Now we can go thieving together. >^^< *Risa clicks her shot gun and aims* Yipe o_o ... *slinks away, calling back* GREAT JOB JAIMIE! :D